The diagram below show the site of school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagram below show the site of school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The first diagram illustrates a map of school sites in 2004. The second diagram shows blue print of school sites in 2024.

Generally, in 2004, the school was built for 600 students, while in 2024 school will extend its capacity, for 1000 students.

In 2024, there were two separate buildings. There was a path between those buildings. The path was ended in sports field. There were main entrance and car park in the left side of school building 1. The only one access of school was road that was built in the left of forest. The forest was stand surrounded the school buildings.

In 2024, there will be three of school buildings. There will no path anymore between school building 1 and 2. The path will be cut, and exist between school building 1 and 3. The sports field will be moved in front of car park 2 that will be built in the right side of school building 3. The second road will be added near the school building two.

Uniquely, there will be no changing with forest landscape.

Overall, in 2024, the school building will be more larger than in 2004, many accesses will be added for the traffic activities.

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the school building will be more larger than in 2004
the school building will be much larger than in 2004

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