The Graph show the proportion of the population 65 aged and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.-Syerapke- (rewrite)

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The Graph show the proportion of the population 65 aged and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.-Syerapke- (rewrite)

The given graph shows the proportion of elderly population during a period 100 years among three different countries, USA, Sweden, and Japan.

Overall, while Japan elderly population takes move slightly before rose dramatically, the elderly proportion of the two western countries, decades by decades, increase similarly.

More clearly, the number of Japan elderly appeared at 5 percent in 1940. This trend, therefore, fell slightly by under 5 percent in the six following decades before increased gradually to 10 percent in 2030. Furthermore, the trend will climb sharply to reach 25 percent and take the highest rate of entire trends onwards.

Nevertheless, other trends reveal that the elderly population either Sweden or USA were quite similar. Both of trends appeared approximately 10 per cent in 1940 then rose slightly by 15 percent in 1980. Therefore, after declining to nearly 12 per cent, those trends took different movement. The Sweden trend increase with fluctuate before predict will reach 25 per cent in 2040, while the western counterpart country after fell slowly indicate the same increased and will reach 23 percent of aged population.

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during a period 100 years
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Sentence: Overall, while Japan elderly population takes move slightly before rose dramatically,
Description: A verb, present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to takes and move

the elderly proportion of the two western countries, decades by decades, increase similarly.
the elderly proportion of the two western countries, decades by decades, increases similarly.

Sentence: Nevertheless, other trends reveal that the elderly population either Sweden or USA were quite similar.
Description: The fragment quite similar . is not usually preceded by were
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace were with was

Sentence: The Sweden trend increase with fluctuate before predict will reach 25 per cent in 2040, while the western counterpart country after fell slowly indicate the same increased and will reach 23 percent of aged population.
Description: The word after is not usually used as an adverb
Suggestion: Refer to after

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