This bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian who found a full-time work after graduating by four months gap, during 6 years since 1995 until 2001.
Overall trend has shown an enhancement during this years, although it fluctuated. In 1996 and 200 there is sharper rises against the general steady increase for both gender except in 1997 wich dropped from about 82% to 81% for male and about 80% to 78% for female, also a slight decrease for male in 2001.
there is a steady growth between 1997 to 2000 for both groups, although the percentage of male were constantly more then female, except in 2001 wich both of them are as same as each other. the highest figure were during the 2000 with approximately 84% for male and 83% for female.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 47, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...l trend has shown an enhancement during this years, although it fluctuated. In 1996 ...
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Line 2, column 98, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are sharper rises'?
Suggestion: there are sharper rises
...although it fluctuated. In 1996 and 200 there is sharper rises against the general steady increase for...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...so a slight decrease for male in 2001. there is a steady growth between 1997 to 2000...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...percentage of male were constantly more then female, except in 2001 wich both of the...
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Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...both of them are as same as each other. the highest figure were during the 2000 wit...
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Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mately 84% for male and 83% for female.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 617.0 965.302439024 64% => OK
No of words: 132.0 196.424390244 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67424242424 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.38956122427 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37133313662 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.681818181818 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 171.9 283.868780488 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8525295679 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.4 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.23603664747 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199405438784 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118329784458 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170475201245 0.0843802449381 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180840130599 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.194246483486 0.0819641961636 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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