The diagram below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for change to the school site in 2024 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The two pictures compare the layout of a school as it was in the year
2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.
It is clear that the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new
school building. The school will then be able to accommodate a
considerably larger number of students.
In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the school, and the two school
buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the
sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils, and a
third building will have been constructed. Furthermore, the plan is to join
the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path that links the
buildings only.
As the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the
original sports field, a new, smaller sports field will need to be laid. A new
road will also be built from the main entrance to the second car park.
Finally, no changes will be made to the main entrance and original car
park.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...layout of a school as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the...
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Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for 2024 involves the addition of a new school building. The school will then be...
^^^
Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chool will then be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students. ...
^^^
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...attending the school, and the two school buildings were separated by a path runni...
^^^
Line 7, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected th...
^^^
Line 8, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed that there will be 1000 pupils, and a third building will have been constructe...
^^^
Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ructed. Furthermore, the plan is to join the two original buildings together, cre...
^^^
Line 10, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., creating a shorter path that links the buildings only. As the third building ...
^^^
Line 12, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ar park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sp...
^^^
Line 13, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sports field will need to be laid. A new road will also be built from the main en...
^^^
Line 15, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de to the main entrance and original car park.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, second, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59016393443 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38670859452 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508196721311 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4584872174 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 3.83414634146 365% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191209585764 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932479695488 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765918139096 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770849545986 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710478417532 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...layout of a school as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the...
^^^
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for 2024 involves the addition of a new school building. The school will then be...
^^^
Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chool will then be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students. ...
^^^
Line 6, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...attending the school, and the two school buildings were separated by a path runni...
^^^
Line 7, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected th...
^^^
Line 8, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed that there will be 1000 pupils, and a third building will have been constructe...
^^^
Line 9, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ructed. Furthermore, the plan is to join the two original buildings together, cre...
^^^
Line 10, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., creating a shorter path that links the buildings only. As the third building ...
^^^
Line 12, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ar park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sp...
^^^
Line 13, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sports field will need to be laid. A new road will also be built from the main en...
^^^
Line 15, column 71, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de to the main entrance and original car park.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, second, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59016393443 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38670859452 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508196721311 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4584872174 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 14.0 3.83414634146 365% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191209585764 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932479695488 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765918139096 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770849545986 0.15604864568 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710478417532 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.2329268293 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 11.4140731707 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.