The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The given diagram shows how carbonated drinks are produced. Overall, the production of carbonated water involves raw water undergoing 5 essential steps consists of cleaning, heating, mixing with other ingredients, filtering, filling, and finally packaging and delivering to the general public.
In the first stage, water will be cleaned. Firstly, raw water is put into the filter where it is softened by particular chemicals and then pumped to the electric heater where the second stage called “heating evaporation and carbonation” happens. According to this stage, water from the heaters will undergo the cooling pipe to the carbon dioxide area where the water is transformed into carbonated water.
In the third stage, the carbonated water will be mixed in a mixing tank with colouring, syrup and flavours. After that, in the fourth stage, the water will filter and fill bottles and cans then they are all available for packaging and delivering to supermarkets and customers.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...finally packaging and delivering to the general public. In the first stage, water will be cle...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, second, so, then, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 832.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4025974026 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77001144406 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9328021227 43.030603864 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.857142857 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0782678898094 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473274187807 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471343614913 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0564909555609 0.15604864568 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027767301639 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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