The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities

The graph and table demonstrate the medium monthly temprature and the average number of hours of sunshine every year in three global metropolitans, temperature is measured in Celsius

Overall, there are a lot of differences between these cities. Although, the highest temperature is identified in New York. It is just below 30 degrees and the lowest temperature is seen in january and it is again new york

The graph illustrates that there is steadily increase out of Sydney. But until april new york's climate increase sharply up to beginning of august, but london is going steadily. Furthermore, Sydney's temperature goes down decreasing till middle of July, after that period this city continue growing steadily. New York and London decrease till December but in that month London's temperature is higher than new york

However table shows us the most shiny megapolis out of this triple, and it is new york. In a year the hour of sun shining is 2535 and sydney is second, and just fewer than first one, 2473 and the last is London to be clearly it is 1180

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tans, temperature is measured in Celsius Overall, there are a lot of differences ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ot of differences between these cities. Although, the highest temperature is identified ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...april new yorks climate increase sharply up to beginning of august, but london is...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... temperature is higher than new york However table shows us the most shiny megapolis...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, second

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88397790055 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63736791758 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591160220994 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4876724857 43.030603864 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.285714286 112.824112599 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8571428571 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.23603664747 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248527559921 0.215688989381 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10388716093 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114044108408 0.0843802449381 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173257911025 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161646994208 0.0819641961636 197% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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