The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.( IELTS Book 3 test 4)

The line graph compares two coutries in term of unemployment rates over a 6-year-period starting in 1993.

It is clear that this rate in US fell dramatically from March 1993 to March 1999. By contrast, there was a sharp increase in the number of unemployment during research period in Japan.

In March 1993, the unemployment rate in US was 7.0 percentage of workforce which higher than Japan at the same time, just under 2.5 percent. This figures of US went down to 5.5 percent by March 1995. Then, it was progesstive stably to March 1997. After that, the number of unemployment dropped smoothly to over 5.0 percent.

There was a lagre jump in this rate from under 2.5 percent to 3.5 percent over a period of 6 years starting in March 1993 in Japan. It progessed stably for 2 years . Afterwards, this figures went up dramatically to over 4.5 percent. In March 1999, Japan's rate was higher than this rate in US.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...n Japan. It progessed stably for 2 years . Afterwards, this figures went up dramat...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 757.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67283950617 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63987665903 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530864197531 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 208.8 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.734090199 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.8181818182 112.824112599 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7272727273 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.363636363636 5.23603664747 7% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351988704028 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154271564798 0.103423049105 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121208860187 0.0843802449381 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249217369629 0.15604864568 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670623386295 0.0819641961636 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 13.2329268293 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.06136585366 86% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.