The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of travelers to Scotland frequenting four distinguished tourist destinations namely Aquarium, Castle, Zoo and Festival over the period of 30 years starting in 1980.
Overall, an upward trend was seen in the percentage of tourists visiting Castle and Zoo whereas the opposite was true for Festival and Aquarium. It is noticeable that Castle was the most popular tourist attraction over the period.
As can be seen from the line graph, the percentage of tourists choosing to visit Castle was nearly 25%, roughly twice as much as that to the Zoo, at 10%. The proportion for Zoo travelers witnessed a minor fluctuation from 10% to 15% during the first 20 years, then rising substantially to 20% in the last year. The percentage of Castle visitors saw a dramatic growth to reach a peak of 45% in 1995, followed by a considerable drop from 1995 to 2010
In terms of the remaining attraction, in 1980, Festival was the most attractive place in Scotland with 30% tourists compared to / in comparison with 20% for Aquarium. Over the following 5 years, the number of Aquarium visitors peaked at 35% before sharply decreasing / which was followed by a sharp decrease to less than 10% in 2010. Meanwhile / by contrast, the figure for travelers to Festival experienced a steady decline over the period shown / throughout the period, ending at approximately 20%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...harp decrease to less than 10% in 2010. Meanwhile / by contrast, the figure for travelers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 232.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01724137931 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8759295863 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577586206897 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4935658286 43.030603864 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.5 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17996930859 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873089551513 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746734232214 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122344370583 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461877061985 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.2329268293 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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