The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh

The line graph compares the rate of tourists to Scotland who visited the Aquarium, Castle, Zoo and Festival from 1980 to 2010.
Overall, from 1980 to 2010 the number of people traveling to Scotland to visit Castle and Zoo grew slightly while the figures for the Aquarium and Festival decreased minimally.
In 1980, Zoo was the most unknown attraction with only 10% of visitors. After this time there was some fluctuations before it witnessed a gradual increase to about 20% in 2010. The Festival was the best place for visitors to Scotland at the first year of the period with the starting point of 30%, ranking the highest out of the four places; however, during the period of 30 years this business was not favorable. There was a serious decrease, reaching a final figure of under around 20% in 2010.
Turning to the other two attractions, The number of travelers who paid a visit to the Aquarium was 20% in 1980. In 1985, there was a rapid growth to a peak of about 35% in 1995 before decreasing significantly to under around 10% in 2010. The percentage of visitors who came to Castle rose dramatically in the period of 15 years. It rose from around 23% in 1980 before reaching a peak of 45% in 1995. In 2010, this figure declined slightly to about 35% at the end of the period.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 33.7804878049 172% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 231.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47011333094 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497835497835 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.465715922 43.030603864 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137453413219 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563666136811 0.103423049105 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780427982047 0.0843802449381 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114117236229 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940474812856 0.0819641961636 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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