The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts depict the average expenditures for household services in two countries of Asia in 2010.
Overall, in 2010, the average percentage of household expenditure for healthcare was the lowest in both 2 countries shown.
In 2010, the rate of resident’s housing cost in Japan was paid with a normal rate, stood at 21% and this figure was lower than that of the remission of families’s housing in Malaysia, by 13% rate. The total of money used for food in Malaysia was a little bit higher than the percentage of that resident dissipation in Japan, by 3%.
As opposed to the expenditure for the other two kinds of service shown above: housing and food in Malaysia, a lot of families in Japan gave more payment to transport, healthcare and other goods, services than Malaysian's families did. The household expenditure for transport in Japan accounted for one fifth the whole percentage and had twofold of the average rate of household expenditure for that. In Malaysia. Similarity, the amount of Japan's families money used for healthcare also had a small double rate of Malaysia's household cost spent on that, while the Japanese’s residents defrayed the cost of other good services with a little bit more 3% than the residents in Malaysia did in 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1056.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95774647887 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79276829724 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 326.7 283.868780488 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.4553017648 43.030603864 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.857142857 112.824112599 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4285714286 22.9334400587 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293092302646 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172590642162 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878422045907 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221968570068 0.15604864568 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885839980019 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.2329268293 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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