The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Bek on Fri, 08/25/2017 - 15:38

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of internet market for retailing services in New Zealand in seperate years, 2003 and 2013 and is measured by percentages.

Overall it is immediately apparent that the major changes were in the clothes and entertainment by decreasing and soaring simultaneously.

It can be clearly seen that one of the less asperiations accounted in pastime at the beginning before going up substantially. Therefore, it stood at 21 % which consisted almost a fifth of total merchandising, but, in stark contrast to that, in 2013, the sales has climbed significantly to 33 %, well above a third.While the percentage of clothes witnessed a marked decline over the period as a whole. Initially, fashion range was one of the most desirable feature of people sitted on the Internet. However, this fraction commenced to go down now and then, by representing a less fifth outcome in 2013.

In comparison with the above two aspects, the relcutants displayed the same trend by growing the whole period of time. Travel levelled off at above a third being the most renwoned among New Zealands at the start and remaining static at the beginning of the next decade (almost a third). Whilst reading has gone up to 3 %, staying the least important in both years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: While
...gnificantly to 33 %, well above a third.While the percentage of clothes witnessed a m...
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Suggestion:
... people sitted on the Internet. However, this fraction commenced to go down now a...
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Suggestion: comparison,
...ng a less fifth outcome in 2013. In comparison with the above two aspects, the relcuta...
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...yed the same trend by growing the whole period of time. Travel levelled off at above a third ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, third, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1064.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04265402844 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99101925342 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 106.607317073 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668246445498 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.807632162 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.222222222 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.23603664747 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117875094429 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440741428326 0.103423049105 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770806370396 0.0843802449381 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845838940226 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100893979173 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.2329268293 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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