The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons whee relevant.

Submitted by nameisken on Sat, 07/13/2019 - 07:23

The maps compare the changes in a university sports centre between the present and future.

Overall, many facilities will be built or expanded in the future.

The first map illustrates the current sports centre that has one main building in-between of two outdoor courts. That main building has a 25m pool in the centre which is surrounded by the gym, reception(with entrance), changing room and seating according to the direction of the north, south, west and east respectively.

The second graph shows the future. In the plan, the main building will not change except the gym will be stretched widely to the east. However, a new structure will be erected on the west side of the main building where has a large leisure pool at the northwest and a changing room with a sports shop at the southwest of the map. Furthermore, several new facilities will be built on the east side of the main building. They are a sports hall which next to the seating, two dance studios in the northeast and changing room with a cafe in the southeast of the plan.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
.... The second graph shows the future. in the plan, the main building will not ch...
^^
Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
... on the east side of the main building. they are a sports hall which next to the sea...
^^^^
Line 7, column 431, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...t side of the main building. they are a sports hall which next to the seating, two dan...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'studio' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'studios'.
Suggestion: studios
...ll which next to the seating, two dance studio at the northeast and changing room with...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 867.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 184.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71195652174 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57500321177 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516304347826 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5435671229 43.030603864 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153329764356 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739800343035 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299433395743 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093608829698 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348759465622 0.0819641961636 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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