Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacation. Give advantages of both and express your own point of views
After exhausted time on school, children need to have a holiday to relax and reduce mental stresses. Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacation. But others believe they should have long vaccation. Today i will talk about both opinion's advantages and give my viewpoint about them.
On the one hand, some school give their students an multiple short vacation. It brings a great number of benefits for students and their families. With it, children can take a breather regularly and they can learn more about outside world. For example, all the kids need sometimes to travel with their families which make them learn more time about outside world, about many others culture, cuisine,.... and many soft skill. Getting multiple short vaccation also help children to be in touch with their studious. In addtion, several short vacation help children to have more and more time to visit their relatives, make lovely memories with their love ones.
On the other hand, giving long vaccation for students have its advantages. When they have long holiday. They can find part-time or full-time jobs that give them tuition, reduce financial burden of their parents. Likewise, on long vacation, student can take part in soft skill courses. For instance dancing, playing musical instructment, cooking. By the way, travelling abroad is the destinations for students on long holiday. Whereas, spending much time to take break. They focus on activities outside without reviewing their lessons in class. Morever, after having a long holiday make chidren feel tired becausr they have to face-tozface with homework. Stop studying a long time make students can't do their excercise quickly and correctly
In summary, i think both multiple shott vacation and long vacation have its advantages. However, after getting long holiday, pupil have many problem to solve with their studious. Since in my viewpoint, i think multiple is better.
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also, but, however, likewise, so, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in summary, by the way, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 965.302439024 171% => OK
No of words: 311.0 196.424390244 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31832797428 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48323542242 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 106.607317073 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553054662379 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 283.868780488 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 3.36585365854 357% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 8.94146341463 224% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0753120402 43.030603864 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.55 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264082544047 0.215688989381 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831152946302 0.103423049105 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936849801345 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195242062436 0.15604864568 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120243813524 0.0819641961636 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 40.7170731707 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.