Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend to you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, our lifespan has been greatly extended in comparison to the past thanks to various healthcare innovations, thus, some people believe that it is a must to significantly increase in the retirement age. In my opinion, extend the working age could lead to some remarkable benefits, however, it would be accompanied with some inevitable problems.
It is undeniable that changing the working age ceiling could bring considerable advantages to the nations. Firstly, having the workforce increased remarkably with experienced workers would allow the economy to develop in all aspects and create wealth for their nations. Foreseeing this, many countries have applied the working age extension in their policies and received great improvement in all economy performance index. Another interesting perk of retirement age extension is that it helps companies to have their experts staying longer, which results in promising organization performance. A great example of this is more than a half of CEOs of corporations in last year Forbes’ top 100 is above 65, and these people are all regarded as their company invaluable assets.
On the other hand, increasing age of retirement could lead to some serious social problems. The first issue is that it would result in corporations with the old men network holding top positions for too long, which would discourage younger and potential employees to climb up their career ladder. Many entrepreneurs have revealed that one of the reasons they chose to start their own business despite of having experience working for prestigious companies simply is that it is impossible to thrive for top positions. Another issue is that when having to work at such old age, people would lose their enthusiasm towards their jobs, and no longer keeping their efficiency. After decades of working hard, most employees should spend their time taking rests, enjoying life and doing things that they have always wanted to do instead of continuing to devote for works.
To sum up, increasing the retirement age has its pros and cons, thus, it is suggested that policy makers should make careful consideration before choosing to apply this policy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, thus, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 5.60731707317 624% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 965.302439024 191% => OK
No of words: 346.0 196.424390244 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32080924855 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80060189566 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 106.607317073 192% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592485549133 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 283.868780488 197% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6077884816 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.615384615 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 22.9334400587 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.23603664747 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196954268008 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760337910852 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04722995026 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127702940361 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526477526239 0.0819641961636 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 40.7170731707 236% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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