Task 1 IELTS Writing Model Cambridge 8 Test 4 Goods transported in UK 1974 2002 my friends version

The below chart illustrates the number of goods (measured in million tonnes) transported during the period from 1974 to 2002 by road, water, rail and pipeline in the UK.

Overall, transportation made by road substantially increased during the period whereas transportation made by rail remained almost unchanged at the end of the period. The quantity of goods sported by water went up at the end of the period while the number of goods transported by pipeline rose at the end of the period.

The quantity of goods transported by road started with just above 70 million tonnes and underwent fluctuations during the period and hiked to just below 100 million tonnes at the end of the period. Transportation made by water began with just below 40 million tonnes in 1974 and reached its initial peak in 1982. From 1982 onwards it remained almost unchanged till1994. Then it decreased to less than 60 million tonnes in 1998 and reached its peak to above 60 million tonnes in 2002.

Transportation made by rail was just above 40 million tonnes in 1974. It underwent fluctuations and remained almost same with above 40 million tonnes at the end of the period in 2002. The quantity of goods transported by pipeline was above 0 million tonnes in 1974 and it went through many changes during the peak. It reached its peak in the year 1994. From 1994 onwards it remained plateaued till 2002 with above 20 million tonnes.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a million'.
Suggestion: a million
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 33.7804878049 181% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1176.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 243.0 196.424390244 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83950617284 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64764848631 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.358024691358 0.547539520022 65% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 330.3 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0769907232 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.23603664747 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127688371019 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641419757044 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494251185096 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10998253085 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444870564524 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.51 8.06136585366 81% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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