You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays You decide to apply for the job Write a letter to the director of the Museum In your letter introduce yourself explain what experience and

Dear Sir/Madam,
I’m writing to apply for the holiday job which you advertised recently in the newspaper. I am twenty-one-year-old student and I speak English quite well. At present I am in my second year studying history at M. S. University and I am very keen to holiday job this summer. I am extremely good at adding up, so I think I would be an asset to your shop.

My term finishes on 5th July and I am free until 20th September. Last year I worked in a restaurant serving tourist from all over the world and I enjoyed it very much. I would like to have an opportunity to meet people and practice my English again.

I enjoy going to museums and am particularly keen on history. Last year I went of an exhibition of Ancient Greek objects which has held in London. I have been often in your museum and familiar with the items you have. I do hope you will be interested in my application.

I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours Faithfully,
Dipen Patel

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ill be interested in my application. I look forward to hearing from you in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, second, so, well, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 5.60731707317 535% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45355191257 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76589113702 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628415300546 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.7800404449 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.2142857143 112.824112599 52% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.0714285714 22.9334400587 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.21428571429 5.23603664747 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246064530304 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759105556005 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724966759158 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12681055521 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623372716957 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 13.2329268293 46% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.64 11.4140731707 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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