Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to express my interest to participate as an active volunteer to serve in the charity programme conduct by your association. Allow me to introduce myself , I am a doctor specialised in Surgery working in a reputed hospital "Green Valley" since fifteen years . Indeed, I opted this profession mainly due to my intense desire to help people in need which is why I am extremely keen to be a part of this event.
Moreover, I have good experience of volunteering as, almost every year I do participate in such noble deeds. Last year, "Help" group had organised a welfare programme to raise funds for the operation of blind children which was quite successful and being a doctor I was able to convince my ophthalmologist peers to perform the surgeries at nominal charges.
Since, I am aware of the fact that this occurrence is in regards to collect money for the treatment of the leprosy patients, it would be feasible for me to persuade common masses to donate generously by educating them about this disease. Also, I will try to induce some of the physician doctors to treat these patients at a very reasonable fee.
Awaiting your prompt reply.
Yours faithfully,
John
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ssociation. Allow me to introduce myself , I am a doctor specialised in Surgery wo...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s;Green Valley' since fifteen years . Indeed, I opted this profession mainly ...
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Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...are of the fact that this occurrence is in regards to collect money for the treatment of the ...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...his disease. Also, I will try to induce some of the physician doctors to treat these patien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 205.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99512195122 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03103044486 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.69756097561 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7756597944 44.8134815571 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.777777778 76.5299724578 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7777777778 16.8248392259 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 4.34317383033 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0922318934558 0.216113520407 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328232179228 0.0766984524023 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381160651014 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0453004536581 0.12726935374 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351460249321 0.0580467560999 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 8.37731958763 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 7.59969072165 127% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 41.2886597938 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.