A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the com

Dear Sir.

My name is Hyomin LEE, who live Busan and I also a big fan of your products.
I am writing with regard to the donation which your company supposed to do for our city.

In my opinion, both plans are meaningful to the citizen. In the case of sponsoring the sports team, children can get more quality sportswear, food and education. The people related to the team such as all the students, family, graduate and near people remember the great sponsor.

As for the concerts, it is a good way to advertise relatively in a short term. There will be lots of people in the stadium with enthusiasm. They will go back to their home with a happy memory of your company.

So, both have benefit, I suggest that your company should sponsor the children sports team. From the long-term perspective, the children you are about to support are the future consumer of your company.

Thanks for your attention. I hope my advise will work well.
Yours faithfully,
Hyomin LEE.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 38, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
... Thanks for your attention. I hope my advise will work well. Yours faithfully, Hyo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, thus, well, as for, such as, in my opinion, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72093023256 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48034458256 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651162790698 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4516123306 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.4615384615 76.5299724578 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2307692308 16.8248392259 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201169042356 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648970114778 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627941611428 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964067220364 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419262290202 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 8.37731958763 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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