A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the company

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
- summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts
- say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,
I have heard about the company’s generous contribution towards the community and writing to you regarding the feedback requested on the same.

Our community has been organizing a large number of events every year, one of which is the open-sir concerts. Local artists are encouraged to perform at these concerts and to provide knowledge about traditional music which was thought to be lost in time. It would be a great boost to the community if the open-air concerts were to be supported by your company. The communal economy would improve a lot as it would invite people from various areas to participate and experience the beauty of such concerts.

Apart from concerts, we have a local children’s sports team which is performing quite well in the Inter-state championship tournament from the past 2 years. They are consecutive winners of the championship for 2 years. They are hoping to enter National Championship next year and it would be great if you could support the team. The community will be recognized as a result of the children’s achievement which would in return boost our economy.

In my opinion, you should support the events equally instead of completely ignoring the either. I hope this helps in your decision making.

Yours faithfully,
Shalaka

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 35, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
.... Our community has been organizing a large number of events every year, one of which is the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, well, apart from, as to, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1092.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12676056338 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86870979907 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615023474178 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 328.5 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.448907197 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 76.5299724578 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174438343886 0.216113520407 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582571451578 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.029945239547 0.0603063233224 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892352624728 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031404441604 0.0580467560999 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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