A museum near your home is looking for people to do part time voluntary unpaid work You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work In your letter explain why you w

Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing with regard to your offered voluntary job.

As a competent historian, I am a follower of history-related items. Certainly, for a history lover like me dealing with antique protected pieces of stuff you are keeping in your museum most deemed as a lovely pastime but not a job. Consequently, working there can put me in a huge pleasure.

Focusing on my skills, I am a 43-year-old woman holding a b.a degree majored in history from Loyal university in 2012. Since I have passed many courses about museum guidelines and regulations I can claim myself as a knowledgeable individual. Add to this I have the experience of working in a museum as a museum guide some years ago. Through that year I have learned vital as well as potent pints in a flawless way. Precisely, not only I have practical qualifications but also academic qualifications and I know all the ins and outs of museum tasks ranging from cleaning to protecting activities. Along with this, I am entirely familiar with financial subjects as I have passed international accountant courses in Canada. Trust, you can count on me for covering a wide variety of tasks in your museum.

About my timetable, currently, I am working as a history teacher at Barford school. This school is just 10 min away from your museum. I usually finish my work at 2 o`clock so I can reach the museum at around 2:30 .in fact, I have the intention of sacrifice my whole evenings to the museum`s activities. I want you to be aware that I am accessible all days of the week excluding Sundays and Saturdays as I am responsible for taking care of my children.

I am eager to earn your feedback at your earliest convenience.

Warm Regards,
Hiva Farahani

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a flawless way" with adverb for "flawless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e learned vital as well as potent pints in a flawless way Precisely not only I have practical qua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, well, in fact, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 937.175257732 153% => OK
No of words: 310.0 206.0 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61935483871 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86869065188 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 127.690721649 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 290.88556701 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 12.6804123711 8% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 310.0 16.3608247423 1895% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 44.8134815571 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1432.0 76.5299724578 1871% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 310.0 16.8248392259 1843% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 74.0 4.34317383033 1704% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254036499231 0.216113520407 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254036499231 0.0766984524023 331% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1502476124 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281742993503 0.0580467560999 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 155.3 8.37731958763 1854% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -234.71 70.7449484536 -332% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 3.82989690722 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 123.0 7.45979381443 1649% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.0 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 22.83 7.59969072165 300% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 8.62886597938 649% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 126.0 8.54432989691 1475% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 126.0 8.15463917526 1545% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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