There have been several complaints about the reception area where the visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved.Write a letter to manager.Describe the complains that have been received.

Dear Sir,

I am writing to suggest some of the refurbishments of our reception area that are essential for the smooth movement of visitors.

As our company has a great reputation as a giant conglomerate in Bangladesh, the office premises especially the reception block does not comply with the standard. There are several issues that need special attention for renovation and improvements. First of all the mosaic tiles got worn out and extremely slippery as well which resulted in several accidents for the incoming guests. Secondly, the area is inadequate to handle around 1000 guests including vendors, official delegates, governmental high-officials and other very important persons (VIPs). Moreover, only a six-person-lift is insufficient to accommodate the huge number of attendants.

Therefore, I would like to propose the total replacement of the floor with wooden tiles which not only will reduce the risk of falling down but also will enhance the aesthetic value of the whole building. Additionally, the new chesterfield can be placed in the waiting zone to ensure the comfort of the out-comers. And finally, installing a 10-person-lift will allow the hassle-free movement for employees and visitors. I definitely expect that these renovations will uplift our organizational image in the foreseeable future.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely yours

A T M Jakir Alam

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...to hearing from you. Sincerely yours A T M Jakir Alam
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 32.9175257732 39% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 937.175257732 127% => OK
No of words: 217.0 206.0 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47926267281 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22183428909 2.54303337028 127% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677419354839 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 290.88556701 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2626326135 44.8134815571 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.090909091 76.5299724578 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7272727273 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 4.34317383033 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984487025393 0.216113520407 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036502133548 0.0766984524023 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353886288542 0.0603063233224 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0596443097044 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422787237091 0.0580467560999 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 8.37731958763 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 70.7449484536 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 8.71597938144 166% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 41.2886597938 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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