Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say Describe the problem How it is affecting your work What needs to be done about it

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to inform you about the problems with the computer which was allotted to me. The computer heats up a lot even it is used only for few minutes, the machine is laggy and switches off multiple times in a day.

Most of my job responsibilities involve entering the account details of the clients into the centralized database of the organization. With a faulty machine, my productivity is affected to a greater extent. Furthermore, there are risks of data loss and data inaccuracy created because of the use of the faulty computer. Additionally, using a machine with thermal problems continuously will lead the battery to explode which in turn is a safety hazard and must be prevented at all costs.

I would request you to replace my computer or repair and service the computer allotted to me to avoid the problems which I have mentioned above.

Regards,
Ayyappan

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 32.9175257732 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 759.0 937.175257732 81% => OK
No of words: 154.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92857142857 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89147758147 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.655844155844 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.6318046269 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.428571429 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57142857143 4.34317383033 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 7.41237113402 13% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173874945208 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637239817495 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801241724678 0.0603063233224 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126842301649 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548760046302 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 70.7449484536 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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