Write a letter to your manager about your work from the last year Include What you did What you think you could improve A training request

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Write a letter to your manager about your work from the last year. Include

What you did
What you think you could improve
A training request

Dear Mr Peters,

I writing to you to give my annual report about the projects that we accomplish in the previous year. To be precise I was involved in two major projects related to the food assessment for regional Australia and for Melbourne city. I was in charge of building 3d models of the area and damage assessment of the forecasted floods. As a result, our team created maps of area hazards with graduation the most hazardous areas to less affected ones.

Over the course of the Melbourne city project, we met an issue related to the memory capacity when a sophisticated multi-parameter model was running. In fact, we were not able to complete this part of the project as we were constantly receiving “not enough memory” error.

Thus, I would like to suggest purchasing a high-performance computing machine in the next financial year because the computer that we are currently using in our department have limited memory capacity, which is not sufficient for the flood simulation. It will significantly increase the running time of the model due to the fact that we are using a wide range of parameters such as rainfall amount, type of soils, outflow, etc.
In addition, I would like to apply for a two-week course related to the latest findings in flood forecasting and crucial modeling parameters. In my opinion, this course will help me to improve our company models. Could you please give me an educational leave in October for this purpose?

Thank you in advance for your cooperation and attention to this matter.

Yours sincerely,
Maria V (GIS-analyst, the cartographic department)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
Dear Mr Peters, I writing to you to give my annual report...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly receiving “not enough memory” error. Thus, I would like to suggest purchasing...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...all amount, type of soils, outflow, etc. In addition, I would like to apply for a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, thus, as to, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 937.175257732 144% => OK
No of words: 268.0 206.0 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02985074627 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91598210893 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 290.88556701 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6302303371 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.692307692 76.5299724578 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 4.34317383033 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105065101464 0.216113520407 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044291573485 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638378332437 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557625581988 0.12726935374 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623578393666 0.0580467560999 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 41.2886597938 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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