You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a par-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter-give details of your study plans-explain why you

Dear Sally,

My departure date for New Zealand is drawing near, and I am busy with preparations. I have enrolled at an institution called 'ABC English' in Wellington, for a six-month Advanced course, full-time. It is quite expensive but I am hopeful of improving my pronunciation, especially.

To assist in covering the costs of my study, I am aim to find a part-time job. Not only are the college fees rather high, but also I know that rental accommodation in the capital city will not be affordable, to say nothing of food and heating expenses!
So I would very much like to arrange some temporary employment before I arrive.

I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends and colleagues to see if anyone wants a house-cleaner, gardener, or nanny for their children. I know you have a wide social network in Wellington which you could canvas for me, if you wouldn't mind. I'd be so grateful.

I look forward to seeing you soon.

Best wishes,

Margot

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sally, My departure date for New Zealand is dra...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...n which you could canvas for me, if you wouldnt mind. Id be so grateful. I look forw...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 258, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...uld canvas for me, if you wouldnt mind. Id be so grateful. I look forward to se...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 811.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79881656805 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92984865903 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.721893491124 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5868605657 44.8134815571 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 4.34317383033 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26587703003 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843418768264 0.0766984524023 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0916955141371 0.0603063233224 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12802813641 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109625658614 0.0580467560999 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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