You are going to have a business trip and arrange your friend to look after your children. Write a letter to the friend, tn your letter, you should:• tell him/her which kind of food your children tike and dislike• tell him/her which kind of activities

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You are going to have a business trip and arrange your friend to look after your children. Write a letter to the friend, tn your letter, you should:
• tell him/her which kind of food your children tike and dislike
• tell him/her which kind of activities your children can attend
• tell him/her the time you will pick up your children

Dear Lily,

I am writing to ask for your help to take care of my kid - Tony, when I am on a business trip from next Monday to next Friday.

As you know, Tony has a fever for all sweet food, especially ice cream. But he is allowed to have it only once every two weeks because he has already got two bad teeth. Therefore, the whole next week he would have no chance to access sweets. Please show your mercy by being tough since he is very good at begging. Besides, he hates fruits but he is really into fruit juice. I would appreciate it very much if you can make one cup of juice every day for him. By the way, I would buy those he likes and take them to your place later this weekend. Except for the above two things, Tony is a cute company and an easy-to-please boy that will bring you little trouble.

Plus, he enjoys playing basketball very much, and I have noticed the basket in your backyard. That would be his playground where he can hang around after school. He sometimes would bring some other kids and play group basketball game. So make some rules when I am away. One-hour physical practice is adequate for a 7-year-old boy, or he would make trouble in having a sound sleep at night by being too excited.

I will pick him up on Friday next week. I'll give you a call right after my landing oft.
Thanks a lot for your help.

Love,
Mandy

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put between 'would' and 'bring'.
Suggestion: would sometimes bring
...ere he can hang around after school. He sometimes would bring some other kids and play group basketba...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 41, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...I will pick him up on Friday next week. Ill give you a call right after my landing ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, really, so, therefore, except for, you know, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1104.0 937.175257732 118% => OK
No of words: 259.0 206.0 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26254826255 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.11209534481 2.54303337028 83% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 127.690721649 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660231660232 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5896580562 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.9411764706 76.5299724578 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2352941176 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 4.34317383033 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135514775707 0.216113520407 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456479565629 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387851784557 0.0603063233224 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919388839584 0.12726935374 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247925508859 0.0580467560999 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 8.37731958763 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 70.7449484536 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 7.59969072165 84% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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