You have recently bought a toy online and after receiving it you discovered a problem with it. Write a letter to the online store you bought it from, and say– Describe the toy.– Explain the problem.– Suggest how it could be solved.

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter in regards to the toy I ordered from your online store last week and received it yesterday. It is a barbie doll house costing Rs 6500. It is a damage piece which I discovered after opening it.

It is a doll house consisting of a bedroom, a drawing room, a kitchen and a bathroom with bathtub. It has 35 miniature set of utensils bed, cabinets, sofa, chair and kitchen items with a barbie. It is a beautiful doll house in pink colour.

The box says that the house is battery operated which unfortunately does not work. I have already changed the batteries of each room but it is still not working. Also mixer grinder and utensils are damaged.

The toy is non-returnable but I request you to make an exception for the same as the toy I received is a damaged one. I would like to exchange the dollhouse for a new one.
Awaiting for a positive response.

Your's faithfully,
Tushar

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...Sir/ Madam, I am writing this letter in regards to the toy I ordered from your online stor...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hich I discovered after opening it. It is a doll house consisting of a bedroom...
^^
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a kitchen and a bathroom with bathtub. It has 35 miniature set of utensils bed, c...
^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... chair and kitchen items with a barbie. It is a beautiful doll house in pink colou...
^^
Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... each room but it is still not working. Also mixer grinder and utensils are damaged....
^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: AWAITING_FOR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'awaiting' or 'waiting for'?
Suggestion: Awaiting; Waiting for
...exchange the dollhouse for a new one. Awaiting for a positive response. Yours faithfull...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 26.3917525773 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 768.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54437869822 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65650820026 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633136094675 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.01192182 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.0769230769 76.5299724578 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0 16.8248392259 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.84615384615 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184206077567 0.216113520407 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446199085739 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670583946131 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810149602982 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795712130504 0.0580467560999 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 8.37731958763 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.16 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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