You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- Give details of why you wo

Dear Sir or Madam ;
I am writing this letter to express my interest about your recent advertisement in local magazine. I am living in Australia since two years ago and I am a study child care in National University, I am very Interest to take care of children because they are very innocent and a smart especially in age 6. Although I am a study in university, I have lots of free time to spend with your children, so I can help your children to learn science subject, in addition, I have experience in working with children because I am used to be a kindergarten teacher and I know how to take care of them.
However, I am a student in university but this semester I have free time to work on my proposal so spending time with your kid could be wonderful experience for both of us .And I have just two classes this semester so I can stay with your children five days a week .
I would be grateful if you accept me in your family.
I am waiting for your answer.
sincerely yours
Sogol Hassani

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 520, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
...e in working with children because I am used to be a kindergarten teacher and I know how t...
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Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...d be wonderful experience for both of us .And I have just two classes this semeste...
^^
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...be wonderful experience for both of us .And I have just two classes this semester s...
^^^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...stay with your children five days a week . I would be grateful if you accept me i...
^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sincerely
...amily. I am waiting for your answer. sincerely yours Sogol Hassani
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Line 6, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aiting for your answer. sincerely yours Sogol Hassani
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 811.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31382978723 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65071463735 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563829787234 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 270.0 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 102.184307274 44.8134815571 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 115.857142857 76.5299724578 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 16.8248392259 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134217231793 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762605414991 0.0766984524023 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347509701023 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10169137916 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246111319214 0.0580467560999 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 8.37731958763 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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