You live in a room in college which you share with another student However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college In your letter describe the s

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my extreme disappointment regarding the allocated room on sharing basis in college.

My name is Tim Smith and I am new comer to Albert College. Although the provided amenities in college are really good, I am facing problems with the shared room. Due to the shortage of rooms, all rooms were occupied with the students. So , I was insisted to share room with one of the students.

As we know, first semester's exams are approaching next month, it is quite hard to study in the room since my room-mate has keen interest towards music and she plays music all the time. Whenever I ask her to lower the volume, she seems reluctant to do so as well as responses very rudly. I feel distracted while study, which is becoming a major issue in my academics.

I would like to live in an accommodation on individual basis. I want the same facilities as given in other rooms of college such as attached bathroom, free access to wifi connection. It would surely help me to download the required material from different websites.

Looking forward for your revert.

Yours sincerely,
Tim Smith

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to express my e...
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Suggestion: newcomer
...lege. My name is Tim Smith and I am new comer to Albert College. Although the provide...
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...ooms were occupied with the students. So , I was insisted to share room with one o...
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...becoming a major issue in my academics. I would like to live in an accommodation...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'accommodation'.
Suggestion: accommodation
...academics. I would like to live in an accommodation on individual basis. I want the same fa...
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...n an accommodation on individual basis. I want the same facilities as given in ot...
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...r revert. Yours sincerely, Tim Smith
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, really, regarding, so, well, while, i feel, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 949.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79292929293 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64762610499 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686868686869 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 292.5 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3624475945 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2307692308 16.8248392259 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15384615385 4.34317383033 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200877992132 0.216113520407 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633440058018 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547554095634 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949774557502 0.12726935374 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559244956965 0.0580467560999 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 8.37731958763 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.91 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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