You live in a room in college which you share with another student However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college In your letterdescribe the situat

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Vaneet Kaur, purpose of this letter is to inform you about problems I am facing in my current accommodation. I share room with two more students. First of all We three have classes at same time, the time we go to our room, we all have different stuff to do, for say one of us wants to call at home or friend, other one wants to play video game and one want to study, so it is hard to focus and maintain the privacy.

Secondly we all are from different religions and hometown, everyone have their own preferences, I am purely vegetarian and other two members eat non-vegetarian food as well, I feel awkward in my own room. I do have some religious beliefs too, I do pray every morning, but I cannot do my stuff in this kind of environment. I have to wake up early to pray, it disturbs them and because of this we do have conflicts and fights.
Last but not least, I really like my surrounding to be neat and clean and most importantly well organized. But my room-mates do nothing to maintain our room clean, even they never put their stuff on designated place. I am the only person who clean the room twice or thrice every week. I am tired of doing their work.

It is my humble request to you either change my room or my room-mates. It would be great for me, if you can provide my private room, but if it is not possible, kindly please accommodate me vegetarian people and who like to keep their surroundings clean. I will be thankful to you for this help.

Yours Sincerely,
Vaneet Kaur

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Average: 8.4 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...deo game and one want to study, so it is hard to focus and maintain the privacy. ...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us beliefs too, I do pray every morning, but I cannot do my stuff in this kind of...
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Line 6, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...urrounding to be neat and clean and most importantly well organized. But my room-...
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Line 8, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...private room, but if it is not possible, kindly please accommodate me vegetarian ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 5.05154639175 337% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 32.9175257732 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1239.0 937.175257732 132% => OK
No of words: 287.0 206.0 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31707317073 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52888231917 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 127.690721649 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581881533101 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 386.1 290.88556701 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.192131203 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141547678345 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598819815997 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497723816687 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871499163859 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547271368558 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...deo game and one want to study, so it is hard to focus and maintain the privacy. ...
^^
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us beliefs too, I do pray every morning, but I cannot do my stuff in this kind of...
^^
Line 6, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...urrounding to be neat and clean and most importantly well organized. But my room-...
^^
Line 8, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...private room, but if it is not possible, kindly please accommodate me vegetarian ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, i feel, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 5.05154639175 337% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 32.9175257732 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1239.0 937.175257732 132% => OK
No of words: 287.0 206.0 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31707317073 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52888231917 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 127.690721649 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581881533101 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 386.1 290.88556701 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.192131203 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141547678345 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598819815997 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497723816687 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871499163859 0.12726935374 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547271368558 0.0580467560999 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.78 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.