You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to the general manager to request some necessary equipment for your future office. In your letter say– What equipment will you need and when?– Explain why you will need it.– Suggest where to ge

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You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to the general manager to request some necessary equipment for your future office. In your letter say

– What equipment will you need and when?
– Explain why you will need it.
– Suggest where to get it from and why.

Dear Mr John,

I am writing this letter you in order to provide me with a new laptop and printer for my new desk as I will be officially there on 1st of June.

I would like to have a business edition laptop and an HP LaserJet printer before 1st of June in order to make sure they are working properly and to copy my work from old laptop to the new one. This is because my job requires rapid response to emails as well as extracting instant reports for managers, yet both have many issues, as they are lagging and slow during my work. I went to the IT department and they told me that I should have new machines.

The purchasing department can buy them at a low price from the computer shop in the city centre because they are an authoritative resource of electronic appliances which seem rare trait, nowadays, in comparison with other shops. They open six days a week except for Friday.

I am looking for to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Paula

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...ging and slow during my work. I went to the IT department and they told me that I shou...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from you soon. Yours sincerely, Paula
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
look, so, well, except for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 793.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43016759777 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40820357565 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648044692737 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1178241165 44.8134815571 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.125 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128248609528 0.216113520407 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656241842679 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737521588955 0.0603063233224 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103932246547 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924612601614 0.0580467560999 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 8.62886597938 197% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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