You would like to participate in work related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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You would like to participate in work related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Saurabh Dumbre, working in Oberoi Hotels and Resort as a Assistant Revenue manager . I received an email from Human resource department regarding an event on Revenue management and its future in hotel industry.
I would request you to advise me, How can I participate in seminar and provide me the details with date and time of the programme. I would also request you to let me know if any accommodation is included in the price and if not, where could I find suitable accommodation near to the event, as I am new to Australia.
If you could advise me, if any transportation is arranged for delegates from airport and hotel to the meeting place. Also let me know, what is the last date for submission of application with cost and payment details.
I will be waiting for your positive response.
Yours faithfully,
Saurabh Dumbre

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 61, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... working in Oberoi Hotels and Resort as a Assistant Revenue manager . I received ...
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Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nd Resort as a Assistant Revenue manager . I received an email from Human resource...
^^
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ls with date and time of the programme. I would also request you to let me know i...
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Line 4, column 117, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...airport and hotel to the meeting place. Also let me know, what is the last date for ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 711.0 937.175257732 76% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82575882595 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 127.690721649 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0159693887 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.875 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.875 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154866320468 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583792220208 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485357368586 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801866933679 0.12726935374 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527805660388 0.0580467560999 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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