Your child is going on a trip to another country for 3 days. School is looking for some parents who can join the trip and you decided to apply for the same. You are interested in going with trip. Write a letter to the head of the school and include:•Why

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to enquire about a few things for the upcoming trip to Singapore that is being organized by the school for its student from grade 5-8. Allow me to elaborate.

Travelling with children can be quite a daunting task and requires parents to be with their kids all the time. However, I have previous experience of working as a boy scout and I think I have much experience in dealing with kids and would be an appropriate fit.

Since we are travelling with about 30 students, I think I can take care of at least 10 students at all the time. We can form 3 groups and I will take complete responsibility of one group and them being safe. I know it may sound a lot, but I have previous experience in dealing with kids and can do it very well.

Furthermore, I have been thinking about a few things which I would like to ask. Firstly, how many parents are coming along? Secondly, should we all decide on the school as the meeting place before departure? Lastly, should we send out a letter to parents to avoid sending children with cash and rather resort to prepaid cards?

I will be waiting for your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Brad Jason

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to enquire about a few thin...
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Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing for your reply. Yours sincerely, Brad Jason
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, well, at least, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 963.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 213.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52112676056 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52785404379 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605633802817 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1142948024 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0769230769 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 16.8248392259 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76923076923 4.34317383033 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167315358105 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555070771911 0.0766984524023 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058104465968 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10548667307 0.12726935374 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06402336565 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 8.71597938144 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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