Your family is going to move to another town Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son

Dear Sir,
My family is shifting to another town in Punjab. Currently my son is studying in 9th class in St. Joseph's school. I am writing this to you to ask for your permission to accept my son in the same standard in your institute. I will elaborate my case further ahead.
I am working as an Lieutenant General in the Indian Army. So, I need to move with my unit all the time and as per the protocol even my family needs to travel with me. Although, this is fun but it constantly becomes a reason for my child's school change every time. That is why I request you to allow my child to join DAV Public School from the 10th of this month. As, it will not hamper my pupil's progress in this session. He has already got his transfer certificate from the previous school.
Please grant permission for the sake of my kid's future.
Thanking you,
Yours faithfully,
XYZ

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... will elaborate my case further ahead. I am working as an Lieutenant General in ...
^
Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...my case further ahead. I am working as an Lieutenant General in the Indian Army. ...
^^
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lic School from the 10th of this month. As, it will not hamper my pupils progress ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 707.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36419753086 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37705622169 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 211.5 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.3047777653 44.8134815571 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.9166666667 76.5299724578 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 4.34317383033 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202696846632 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733812433729 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765203443997 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124350085176 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128261856283 0.0580467560999 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 8.37731958763 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.42 8.71597938144 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 41.2886597938 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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