In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?
Shopping has always played a major role in family time. We can easily notice that, recently, it has changed its figures evolving from a boring and necessary household task, to reach a more entertaining connotation. In my opinion, this is mainly due to the incipient technology that dominates our lifestyles and some cultural and working changes that we experienced in the last decades.
Firstly, the possibility to shopping online, comfortably clicking on a webpage what you want to buy, regardless of time and setting, is a major component in pushing more and more people to shop on-line and to th...
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Thank you!I'll keep practice
Thank you!I'll keep practice and I'll try to follow your suggestions!
flaws:
It is great. Some improvements:
In the introduction paragraph, you can give a reasonable not a dogmatic statement.
In the paragraph 4, better to have a qualification -- moderate your position. This may involve a sentence beginning with "but" or "however".... for example, shopping as a hobby may waste time and money...
In the paragraph 5 for the conclusion, you can go back and reinforce the thesis: still advantages are more than disadvantages.
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