As children become adults, their social behavior changes in some ways.What are the main differences between young children’s social behavior and that of adults. To what extend are the changes that took place good?

The success of the society hardly depends on how individuals are interacting with each other. Therefore it is vital that children while growing are gathering knowledge about mature social behavior and are taught by adults what should be considered either positive or negative. As a result, there are some key transformations in the way how adults interact with others in comparison to how youngsters do. This essay will discuss changes and how these infuence society.

The key difference between children and adults is that older people in most cases have much more life experience, thus, they know which actions should be taken with regard to challenges they face and usually make decisions by themselves. In contrast, children are used to relying on advices of either parents or teachers in making decisions. In addition, recent research has revealed that more than two thirds of children are reluctant to taking all kinds of responsibility, while among adults this portion is slightly lower than one third.

There is no doubt that independent and self confident people who are ready to take responsibility are essential for society. Therefore, without stated above changes it will be impossible to interact with each other and to work together on collective projects. For example, several groups of children and of adults were given simultaneously a simple task which demanded cooperation of team members, as a result, adults has won that competition with dramatical gap, due to their ability to communicate effectively with each other.

In conclusion, children while growing are gathering essential skills and knowledge without which neither social interaction nor personal success are not possible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...iduals are interacting with each other. Therefore it is vital that children while growing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, third, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, in most cases, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39179104478 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8460024412 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.813760544 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.363636364 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1818181818 7.06120827912 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147680943685 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529534998757 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465970083158 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869696919617 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275930116703 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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