Customers are faced with growing numbers of advertisements from striving companies. I support the idea that shoppers are unquestionably influenced by advertisements. This essay will discuss firstly on how purchasers are being allured, and secondly, the proper actions that have to be carried out by the regime with relevant examples.
To begin with, buyers are generally compelled to purchase advertised products owing to the following two findings. Firstly, the battling companies often use celebrities, who have ordinarily millions of fans and are powerful, to endorse the items. Lionel Messi, the greatest football player of the current century, would be a good example. Adidas boots, which were promoted by him, are still being innately longed by youths because they are subconsciously convinced that wearing them would ensure a similar success as Messi. To add to this, the younger generation appears wonderfully happy and the shoes rather generate high motivations in them. Secondly, by far the next common method of grabbing consumers is promising happiness. Take beauty products (facial creams) for an instance. In order to entice clients, the business person usually displays perfect facial images beside the cream. So customers tend to grow sad unless they buy the product, ultimately compelling them to purchase creams regardless of the costs so as to achieve sheer happiness.
Having said that, customers can be protected from the unnecessary spending by the implementation of the two measures as mentioned below. Primarily, the government should levy high taxes on advertising companies. Understandably, imposing higher rate tariffs would demoralise the concerned companies that are just concentrating on profits over to the quality of the product. Next, another way to deal with the matter is to restrict the new forms of advertising, and this strategy has proved worthwhile according to the study. For illustration, advertising institutions are putting a full page adverts in new places like screens on the tube, bus stops, back of taxis, street walls, and so on. This type of advertising is not only surging in astounding ways but also remaining simply invasive. Therefore, if the ministry and Advertising Standard Authority worked hand in hand and enacted criminal laws against the law breakers, the rising advertisements could be mitigated. Since the companies would be paralysed with terrible fears, violating the laws could land them in prisons.
In conclusion, considering heavy taxes and banning unfamiliar ways of advertising, presumably, consumers can be prevented from wasting money subliminally on unneeded products.
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Essay evaluation report
are still being innately longed by youths because they are subconsciously convinced that wearing them would ensure a similar success as Messi.
Description: 'them', 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
To add to this, the younger generation appears wonderfully happy and the shoes rather generate high motivations in them.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
Next, another way to deal with the matter is to restrict
Another way to deal with the matter is to restrict //duplicated
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flaws:
No. of Words: 404 //don't need that much content. just need around 300-350 words. One sentence for an example is enough.
this is too long:
Lionel Messi, the greatest football player of the current century, would be a good example. Adidas boots, which were promoted by him, are still being innately longed by youths because they are subconsciously convinced that wearing them would ensure a similar success as Messi. To add to this, the younger generation appears wonderfully happy and the shoes rather generate high motivations in them.
this is too long:
For illustration, advertising institutions are putting a full page adverts in new places like screens on the tube, bus stops, back of taxis, street walls, and so on. This type of advertising is not only surging in astounding ways but also remaining simply invasive. Therefore, if the ministry and Advertising Standard Authority worked hand in hand and enacted criminal laws against the law breakers, the rising advertisements could be mitigated. Since the companies would be paralysed with terrible fears, violating the laws could land them in prisons.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2183 1500
No. of Different Words: 259 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.403 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.909 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.428 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.25 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.423 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 708, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ext common method of grabbing consumers is promising happiness. Take beauty products facial ...
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Line 3, column 1018, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...purchase creams regardless of the costs so as to achieve sheer happiness. Having sai...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 404.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55940594059 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00521146533 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.648514851485 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9082880025 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.952380952 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38095238095 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240641824344 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629292653676 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638495409017 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145361716649 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454227125261 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 78.4519038076 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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