It is predicated that the majority of older citizens will be rising in some countries. Although elderly people are counted in the age of over 60. To some extent, I would agree with that there are some drawbacks, if there will be a higher number of age population in the future. However, I believe with that there is more positive impacts and bring beneficial growth for the particular country.
Initially, if this forecast will take place in the future, then there will be less number of crimes and violences activities. This will be because as regards to the survey of the older population has shown a downward trend in unethical activities as compared with young and adult people. Secondly, there will be a significant increase in the number of highly and quality employees in the organization, which is called ‘brain drain’. Moreover, this age group will lead to the growth in the economy. And thirdly, there will be control in the population growth and at the same time there will be rise of job opportunity in their surround environment. In an additional, since elderly people uphold traditional and moral values, young generations can easily inherit these extraordinarily valuable when working or living with older people. This allows a country to expose and carry on their culture and tradition throughout different generations, which is also bringing benefit and progress of the tourism industry. Somehow, this type of situation will be rise only on the old stage, where they want to have a good relationship with another without having any ego, selfish and cruel behavior. Furthermore, At this older generation stage they will be become more supportive and trustworthy person as well.
Beside, I believe that the upsurge of aged population can cause a series of problems to the society as a whole. The first issue is the strain on national budget which have to be invested in medical care and retirement fund more than other sectors such as education, industries and transport. This leads to the imbalance development of society and lack of basic living standard of other age groups. Additionally, because of the growing of old people, the demand for spending rises, but the young workforce who earn money in each family declines rapidly. This causes a heavy financial burden on young generations and stagnant economy of society in the long term.
In conclusion, I personally believe with that this prediction can create the unity in the community as a whole and at the same time it will also bring infrastructure and economic growth in the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, as regards, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04683840749 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79090297445 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529274004684 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 506.74238477 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8606297754 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.421052632 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26315789474 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200761282786 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623772256944 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365742261306 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106807359534 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652015186201 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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