It is evident that processed food and drink goods that contain high levels of sugar harmfully impact our health. Therefore, it is suggested to levy higher price for sugary products in order to reduce public sugar consumption. I strongly concur with the statement because the idea of making high sugar products more expensive can significantly change people's behavior and increase their health status.
To begin with, making people pay more on manufactured food and beverages that contain high levels of sugar will reduce the potential of chronic disease's development such as obesity, diabetes mellitus and cardiovascular disease. This statement are confirmed by the study conducted in the USA that sweet diet was significantly associated with the raising incidents of obesity and type 2 diabetes mellitus. Additionally, the study also calculated the potential increase in cardiovascular disease cases related to the high number of obesity and diabetes mellitus. Thus, applying higher cost in sugary products will make people more selective in choosing their diet and hopefully can also reduce their sugar consumption.
Furthermore, imposing higher price in sugary products will also impacting people preference in healthy products. A study in Indonesia revealed that taxing more in sugary products consequently increase the sale of wholesome products either those which priced cheaper or at the same price at 3 to 5%. This phenomenon shows positive impact of increasing unhealthy products price to the change in people's behavior and awareness in maintaining their health status. Thus, the government should considering more taxes on sugary products in order to make people choose healthy diet.
To sum up, imposing higher price in sugary meals and beverages can be very beneficial for preventing chronic diseases and increase public behavior and awareness about choosing healthy diet.
- The diagram below shows process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry Brick manufacturing 78
- Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree 67
- The chart below shows information about subway systems in three major European cities Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons 67
- The table below show the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two period Summarise
- The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000 2004 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'diseases'' or 'disease's'?
Suggestion: diseases'; disease's
...ar will reduce the potential of chronic diseases development such as obesity, diabetes m...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ith the raising incidents of obesity and type 2 diabetes mellitus. Additionally, ...
^^
Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'impact'
Suggestion: impact
...gher price in sugary products will also impacting people preference in healthy products. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... awareness about choosing healthy diet.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59027777778 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79362666132 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506944444444 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.68953706 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.166666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281113384525 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118857322049 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692808270592 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17583493622 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101584620532 0.056905535591 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'diseases'' or 'disease's'?
Suggestion: diseases'; disease's
...ar will reduce the potential of chronic diseases development such as obesity, diabetes m...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ith the raising incidents of obesity and type 2 diabetes mellitus. Additionally, ...
^^
Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'impact'
Suggestion: impact
...gher price in sugary products will also impacting people preference in healthy products. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... awareness about choosing healthy diet.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59027777778 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79362666132 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 176.041082164 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506944444444 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.68953706 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.166666667 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281113384525 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118857322049 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692808270592 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17583493622 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101584620532 0.056905535591 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.