Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar which causes many health problems Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar Do you agree or disagree

The diversity of food and drink products. nowadays leads to the abusement of sugar that can cause many health issues. The resolution to cut down the amount of sugar by increasing price of sugary products can take both advantages and disadvantages for sellers and buyers.
In terms of positive aspects, this action can mitigate the high levels of sugar going to our body, which helps improve our health and prevent some severe diseases like cardio-vascular or diabetes. Furthermore, it contributes to the preservation of sugar canes and dedicates to the green of our environment in general.
However, making pr sugary products more expensive can be controversial to the market. Initially, using less sugar can decrease the taste of the dishes, especially the sugary products (cakes, sweets, coca, etc.). Therefore, it can change the original and unique smell and taste of products, which could have been famous for their old edition. Secondly, sugar is one of the most common ingredients used over time with cheap price, so this might result in the resistance of consumers. Last but not least, the enterprises and manufactures with escalated prices could not compete to others having pertinent goods and prices. For instance, in Vietnam, it is 10,000 VND for 500 grams of sugar without brand must have been consumed more than 20,000 VND for the same amount though with brand.
In conclusion, firms should not make their products more expensive just to lessen sugar consumption. It should depend on the awareness of the users.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1277.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12851405622 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70005588263 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622489959839 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3171870996 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2307692308 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296498961858 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100906652938 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649659896704 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17513032511 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449348585724 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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