Nowadays, innovation and new technologies play a vital role in the daily routine of humans. This is the reason why they altered the way that children spend their spare time. While this phenomenon has some advantages, I strongly believe that its benefits are overshadowed by its disadvantage.
On the one hand, the appearance of state-of-the-art technologies brought two major benefits. The first rationale is that children can approach enormous valuable knowledge on the internet easily because it only takes a few seconds to search for them. For example, children widen their understanding of wildlife by watching the animal world channels or many short videos on Youtube. Secondly, thanks to the internet, children discover and meet many new cultures and friends around the world by using social networks such as Facebook, .
Zalo, and so on.
On the other hand, I support the view that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. One consideration is that children stick their eyes on the screen for a long time, they will be isolated from society and lack individual skills. For instance, they do not want to communicate with anyone even their parents, and become grumpy. In addition, while a number of bad news and tabloids float on social networks, children can not control their minds. They easy to be addicted and do not live without smartphones or tablets. Finally, spending much time on phones can pose a physical and mental health risk to humans. For example, children who join outdoor activities are stronger than others who do not interact with their mates.
In short, it seems to me that the disadvantages of innovation technologies are more considerate than its advantage
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in short, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15328467153 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82684650397 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627737226277 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8690031592 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.25 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101897494052 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332133164227 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336635917132 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0620372302909 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324349636152 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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