In the modern day, Environmental issues have always been a matter of debate. Many people believe that because of the lack of fauna and flora populations, our ecosystem is being damaged. Other people assume that there are a lot more significant culprits causing the dilemma. In my opinion, the second idea convinced me for some reasons.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that the natural environment is being protected by the populations living there. To make it more clear, plants and animals living in the same habitat survive through many generations by coexisting, some animals or plants play a vital role in the food chain which means if a specific specie disappears, the balance of the natural environment will be diminished. For instance, the wolf usually hunts for rabbits as their main food source and rabbits consume grasses or herbs to survive, if there is any external or internal detrimental effect exerted on the wolf population, then the number of rabbits will increase remarkably. As a result, many kinds of plants will vanish because there are too many rabbits that feed on them.
On the other hand, there is an even more crucial culprit that drives the ecosystem to the verge of destruction - human activities. Through thousands of years of civilization, human numbers have been rocketing tremendously, they created many advanced implements making life easier. However, the by-products of those tools are toxins for the wildlife species. For example, there are more and more factories erected for construction materials that emit Carbon Dioxide into the atmosphere, making it polluted and demolishing animals that fly or breathe the air nearby. Therefore, due to the domino effect, the disappearance of the whole ecosystem would be just a matter of time.
In conclusion, the loss of a certain specie does affect the whole existence of the natural environment. However, I believe that is just a microscopic vision. Having looked at a broader view, there are many reasons that cause this problem, specifically human activities.
- alternatives treatments instead of visiting doctors
In the modern day, visiting a doctor is not the only way to treat patients’ conditions because many people who have health problems believe there are other alternatives such as using functional foods, medicines from Pharmacies, or even traditional treatments. In my opinion, this is a negative tendency that needs to be diminished for some reasons.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that there are many ways for people with ailments to treat diseases without the help of physicians. To make it more clear, patients can apply many natural remedies that have been passed through many generations in order to treat a common disease such as the flu instead of taking time to go to the hospital. Moreover, meditation is a really effective way to keep their minds strong when facing a terminal disease that cannot be fully cured by modern medicines. For example, many researchers have shown that people suffering from cancer and facing it with an optimistic view are likely to have a better living standard and live longer than those who really concern about their left time to live. Hence, there are other methods that can assist patients in dealing with an ailment.
On the other hand, a medical doctor is the only person that understands the epidemiology of diseases, how these affect patients’ life quality, and treat the conditions thoroughly. Specifically, physicians spent 6 years in medical school and dedicated their lifetimes to enhancing professional skills and updating new knowledge to apply appropriate treatments for patients. For instance, patients taking medicines that are purchased online are likely to ignore the daily dose, so their conditions are not relieved at all, but also aggravated because of drug abuse. Having looked at another aspect, Doctors are scientists who are concerned with the well-being state and how to harness medicine appropriately because medicines are basically toxins but if we keep the concentration at a balanced level, its beneficial effects will definitely treat ailments.
In conclusion, going to the hospital is not the only way to treat a disease, there are many alternatives such as using traditional remedies or meditation. Having said that, we cannot deny the critical role of physicians who are the key factor in treating the disease because they have dedicated their life to social health.
- It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and others are not However it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician 78
- Nowadays a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor Do you think this is a positive or negative development 78
- Some people think that it is more beneficial to play sports that are played in teams e g football However some people think that it is more beneficial to play individual sports e g tennis and swimming Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
- The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 78
- Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on outdoor sports Why is it a positive or negative development 84
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 13.1623246493 296% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3875.0 1615.20841683 240% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 719.0 315.596192385 228% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38942976356 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17824056563 4.20363070211 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.11911588112 2.80592935109 182% => OK
Unique words: 344.0 176.041082164 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478442280946 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1215.9 506.74238477 240% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.6395815674 49.4020404114 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.620689655 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7931034483 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41379310345 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143446953587 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322829578285 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394737724835 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861760671257 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100458312852 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 186.0 78.4519038076 237% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ond idea convinced me for some reasons. On the one hand, it is undeniable that t...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...treatments instead of visiting doctors ![Untitled]https://s3-us-west-2.amaz...
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Line 12, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...eds to be diminished for some reasons. On the one hand, it is undeniable th...
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...t patients in dealing with an ailment. On the other hand, a medical doctor ...
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...effects will definitely treat ailments. In conclusion, going to the hospital...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 13.1623246493 296% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 7.30460921844 329% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3875.0 1615.20841683 240% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 719.0 315.596192385 228% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38942976356 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.17824056563 4.20363070211 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.11911588112 2.80592935109 182% => OK
Unique words: 344.0 176.041082164 195% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478442280946 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1215.9 506.74238477 240% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.6395815674 49.4020404114 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.620689655 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7931034483 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41379310345 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.38176352705 228% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143446953587 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322829578285 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394737724835 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861760671257 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100458312852 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 186.0 78.4519038076 237% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.