At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, several countries in the world have a higher number of adults compared to that of the elderly. While this trend may have some demerits, I believe that they are eclipsed by the benefits.
To begin with, a comparatively large number of the young population could help to reduce the burden on them. Particularly, many people have to not only nourish their children but also take care of their parents, so the strain put on this sandwich generation could be lowered if there are fewer older people. For example, a family that has more than one child would be put under less pressure when the parents become older, because they may share their responsibility. Furthermore, a great number of young adults could increase the labour sources of a country. In more detail, the adults are the main source of employment, so the more young people a country has, the less insufficient workers in an economy. Clearly, a country with a higher number of adults would have less burden and more chances to develop.
However, some people still claim that the lower number of the elderly could lead to the lack of skilled employees in many areas. They may believe that the old people have not only more experience but also valuable knowledge that a young man would not have. But I completely argue that the adults would be taught to approach their work in more modern ways which are faster and more convenient. To be specific, at the present time, people are trying to apply technology as much as they can in almost all fields, unlike what people did in the past. For instance, many complex calculations now can be done by artificial intelligence, which is faster compared to the traditional methods of our grandparents. As a result, a country could have a great deal of young adults who are proficient in working in state-of-the-art ways.
To sum up, the benefits of this trend certainly outweigh its drawbacks. Not only can reduce the burden put on the sandwich generation but they also help to raise the number of labourers. Moreover, including more young adults means having more qualified workers with a great ability of technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86849315068 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65250760314 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504109589041 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4272915194 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.529411765 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289438826459 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993123695278 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062652206976 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181688778208 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320955487343 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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