It is argued that it is more beneficial to spend money for prevention from diseases rather than to treat with expensive costs. I completely agree with this statement and think that this way can save time and money which are key factors of life.
First of all, I believe that preventing reduces health risk and it results longevity. In other words, if someone has already dangerous illness which affects directly to life, he or she will follow strict discipline and lie on the bed for all day to treat but sometimes it may not effective. Moreover, many people lost their time to live because of poor personal management such as over consumed fat and sugar and lack of active exercises. For example, a recent study found that 80%of death related to liver is caused by alcoholic beverages and smoking. Thus, everyone should get rid of their bad habits and take approach to prevent diseases rather than devote all things after they were sick, which allows people to continue their happy and free life.
Secondly, undertaking methods to avoid illness can keep financial stability. Because treatment requires a lot of money and then person who has fatal disease dedicate their whole stocks to survive. For instance, my cousin had to go Korea for surgery due to his sickness and cost of this surgery was about 160million tugrugs. For my family, even it sounds extremely expensive but we did everything to save him. Therefore, I suggest that preventing is the best effort of healthy and wealthy life.
In conclusion, I strongly think that investing in preventative methods instead of cure payment is more successful and makes enjoyable and valuable time.
- The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 78
- the pie chart show the electricity generated in Germany and france from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 73
- The bar chart below shows the estimated percentage of car trips taken by drivers in 2005. 78
- The bar chart below shows the estimated percentage of car trips taken by drivers in 2005. 78
- Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree or disagree 81
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd money which are key factors of life. First of all, I believe that preventing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96402877698 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50749097673 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.676258992806 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6030600694 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.153846154 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12222855 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428353535265 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476691968008 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829400437206 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317593689384 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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