Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks.
Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, world has become depend on technology. Due to social media everything become easier to everyone. So day by day access of social media usages has been increasing among all age group of people. However, it also has many drawbacks which can occure problem with users personal information. According to me, every social media user's should be more concerned about their use. If they utilise it in a secure way then the advantages of social media is more than disadvantage.
Firstly, social media has played a essential roles in human life and its a great revolution of technology.
By this social access people able to easily communicates with whole world. Mostly, it used in education, health and marketing sectors. For instance, in this pandemic situation, now people can help each other through various social apps by given many health advices. Many doctors or physician open the online consultations system. Beside it, now, womens can do online business via use of different social apps such as facebook, Instagram and so on Which turn into a better income sources of women. There are plenty of usage of internet in the every shape of human life.
In contrast with, we know that everything has also few badsides like that excess depend on social media can bring huge problems in our life. Some people does maintains as much as privacy on platform of internet while they put their many personal information without maintaining any privacy so it can hamper their own life. For example, my elder sister is one kind of social kit, she has uploaded her all pictures and daily activities on facebook, one day this activity had brought a serious problem in her life, a random guy used her picture for his own motive by using another facebook account. So, in this case, local police was helping her to overcome from this issues. In this situation, she has learned that she should maintain her own privacy. Because, people could able to control her access on social apps, its own responsibility to maintain the all cautions. So it would be happened in real life too, if we are not much aware about our security.
To sum up, I think, social media is a blessing for us, though it has some drawback but I believe that the advantages are more than this problems and we can easily overcome from this problem by our awareness. From above discussion, we can relise that, In this tech era, human life is incomplete without internet. So we have to use it in proper way to help each other.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...roblem with users personal information. According to me, every social media users should be mor...
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Line 1, column 381, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ould be more concerned about their use. If they utilise it in a secure way then th...
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Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a secure way" with adverb for "secure"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ned about their use. If they utilise it in a secure way then the advantages of social media is ...
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Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...age. Firstly, social media has played a essential roles in human life and its a...
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Line 2, column 46, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
...ly, social media has played a essential roles in human life and its a great revolutio...
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Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...yed a essential roles in human life and its a great revolution of technology. By t...
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Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'consultations'' or 'consultation's'?
Suggestion: consultations'; consultation's
...ny doctors or physician open the online consultations system. Beside it, now, womens can do o...
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Line 4, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... in the every shape of human life. In contrast with, we know that everything has also ...
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Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much personal information', 'a good deal of personal information'.
Suggestion: much personal information; a good deal of personal information
...atform of internet while they put their many personal information without maintaining any privacy so it c...
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Line 4, column 661, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...police was helping her to overcome from this issues. In this situation, she has lear...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...lieve that the advantages are more than this problems and we can easily overcome fro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77674418605 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49317510818 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541860465116 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8650557821 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3043478261 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253994677188 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799644392435 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848680722629 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166057683309 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103782402839 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...roblem with users personal information. According to me, every social media users should be mor...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 381, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ould be more concerned about their use. If they utilise it in a secure way then th...
^^
Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a secure way" with adverb for "secure"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ned about their use. If they utilise it in a secure way then the advantages of social media is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...age. Firstly, social media has played a essential roles in human life and its a...
^
Line 2, column 46, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'role'?
Suggestion: role
...ly, social media has played a essential roles in human life and its a great revolutio...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...yed a essential roles in human life and its a great revolution of technology. By t...
^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'consultations'' or 'consultation's'?
Suggestion: consultations'; consultation's
...ny doctors or physician open the online consultations system. Beside it, now, womens can do o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... in the every shape of human life. In contrast with, we know that everything has also ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much personal information', 'a good deal of personal information'.
Suggestion: much personal information; a good deal of personal information
...atform of internet while they put their many personal information without maintaining any privacy so it c...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 661, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...police was helping her to overcome from this issues. In this situation, she has lear...
^^^^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...lieve that the advantages are more than this problems and we can easily overcome fro...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, while, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, kind of, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 430.0 315.596192385 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77674418605 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49317510818 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541860465116 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8650557821 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3043478261 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6956521739 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78260869565 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253994677188 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799644392435 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848680722629 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166057683309 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103782402839 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.