Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
there is a argue between people think that allow children to make the choice on everyday matters related to them will make them become selfish and people think it is nessasary to let them decide the matters that affect them. In now a day, we got many choice on almost eveythings include foods, education and products. Due to this reason, it become more improtant to let children know how they make the right choice.
On one hand, the childrens have not yet build up their own critical thinking to decide what is right and wrong. when we were child we may alway want to eat a lot of candy and play with our favorite toy just because we do not think much about are those choices are benefit or hurt us. And then, when we go to school or our parents have told us, we have an idea that everythings we do have their own pros and cons so we started to know what is choice. if we just allow children to make their own choice on all their matter, they will build up a wrong value that they can get anythings if they want to. it is not hard to think what person those children will become. they may think that all the governmet decision should benefit them and if it do not, it will be the wrong of government.
Meanwhile, making choice can let children to learn how to balane the advantage and disadvantage of everythings. In enconomic, there have a term called ''opportunities cost'' which means that when we do or have somethings, we must sacrifice somethings. To teach children how to make a choice, we must first lets them make a choice so as to let them know what results they will get after the choice they make. For example, if a children alway want to eat candy everyday, then they will know eat too much candy may hurt their teeth and affect their outlook. parents allow children make their own choice can let them experience not every choices they made will benefit them and learn that everythings have their own pros and cons. when they grow up they can know not all the things are they want but it might be they need.
To sum up, making choice is a kind of education to build up a value for the children. The parents can let children make their own choice but need to teach them how to make the right choice.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, so, then, while, as to, for example, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 7.85571142285 267% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 24.0651302605 266% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 416.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33653846154 5.12529762239 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18156422051 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408653846154 0.561755894193 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6936364558 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.117647059 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226913436357 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928009720899 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726575847844 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170333763942 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120622809953 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.42 8.58950901804 75% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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