Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education Discuss both these views and give your opinion

It is undoubted that including sport in school curricula would help children cultivate practical skills. Nevertheless, some people said that playing sports in schools is unimportant because it waste time and resources. Although both sides have its explanation, I strongly concur that doing workout in schools will teach students essentials soft skills that also beneficial for their future.

On the one side, playing sport in schools will minimize the time used for academic learning. Therefore, many parents thought that it will consequently affect their children academic performance and potentially harm their opportunity in finding well-paid job in the future. Additionally, schools also have to allocate more resources such as proper building and equipment if they put sports as one of their priority subject. As a results, parents have to pay more on school fee which very incriminating for several middle-low income families.

On the other hand, some people believe that sport play a vital part in education because through sport, children will not only get a chance in doing physical activity but also learning how to work in a team and building their soft skills. For instance, during football game, students are taught how to formulate strategy as a teamwork beside their physical workout. Moreover, the students also have an opportunity to deal with unpleasant moment such as if they get lose on competitions. Hence, playing sports is not only improving their physical health but also their mentality strength.

To sum up, although having sport in schools means more allocation on time and resources, its merits on students' physical and mental improvement should also taken into account.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39700374532 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74162419878 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580524344569 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2761701496 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.083333333 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0833333333 7.06120827912 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279663886651 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109867029582 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904562556123 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17490600378 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520887476147 0.056905535591 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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