In life, many events occur in our life including bad life events. Some people argue that the best way to deal with them is by accepting, while others believe that it is better to strive to change the situation. I personally agree with the latter statement where the best way to deal with unwanted circumstances is by struggling to make the situation better.
Some people believe that accepting is the best way to deal with bad situations. They think that accepting unwanted situations has positive impact to their happiness and mental health. For instance, an employee is paid with unsatisfactory wage. Nevertheless, rather than complaining, he chooses to accept that situation. As a result, his happiness and mental health does not badly affected by those unwanted situations and he can keep being happy and productive. Even though this seems to be a good solution, but this choice can not change the unwanted situations. Finally he can get an improvement of his bad situation.
Other people think that attempting to change the situation is a better way to deal with bad situations. This is because they believe that this choice can turn bad situations to better situations. For example, there is another employee who is paid with low wage. Reacting to his condition, he chooses to improve his skills and his work performance with a hope to get better payment. As a result, his boss and superiors realize his improvement and finally increase his salary.
In conclusion, I believe that accepting is a good way to deal with unwanted circumstances because it can maintain someone's happiness and good mental health, but striving to improve the situation is a better way because it can turn bad situation to a better situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...piness and mental health does not badly affected by those unwanted situations and he can...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...can not change the unwanted situations. Finally he can get an improvement of his bad si...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99653979239 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82623352431 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43598615917 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4231702073 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.25 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222049179365 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886390852881 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676988025551 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156780590243 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121236117137 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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