Opinions are divided on whether the extinction of certain plants and animals is the major problem associated with the environment or whether there are other environmental problems that deserve more notice. While I understand why some people consider the loss of specific creatures as the most essential problem, I am still in favor of the latter view.
It is understandable why people believe that the sharp reduction in several species is the biggest environmental issue to be concerned with. From their point of view, the number of species in recent years has dropped a great deal which can give rise to an unbalanced ecosystem. This situation can be the result of the overexploitation of natural resources. In other words, many illegal hunts are conducted throughout the year, which makes plenty of animals on the verge of extinction. In addition, devastating forests to make room for residential areas destroys a number of natural habitats. Not only does this action result in the loss of shelters of many species, but also the disappearance of various plants.
Nevertheless, I still side with those who believe that there are more important problems related to the environment needed to be cared about. To put it in a simple way, such problems that cause detrimental effects to people’s health should be top priority. One illustration of this is the degradation of air quality in recent years. If people inhale such polluted air, they have a higher risk of suffering from respiratory diseases such as lung cancer. Moreover, the ozone layer whose purpose is to deter ultraviolet rays from entering the atmosphere has been destroyed gradually. This explains the increase in the number of patients who face skin cancer as they expose the harmful rays on a regular basis.
In conclusion, despite acknowledging why some people hold the belief that the most remarkable environmental problem is associated with the loss of particular animals and plants, I am of the opinion that other issues that directly affect human health is more prominent.
- The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about the consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030 78
- The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.Write a report 78
- The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages To what extent do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any releva 78
- The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes
- Some people think that taxation should be able to keep to a minimum as the money people earn should be theirs to do with as they wish Others believe that people should pay a significant level of tax in order to support the public services we all depend on 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a simple way" with adverb for "simple"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ent needed to be cared about. To put it in a simple way, such problems that cause detrimental e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13173652695 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89934777236 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580838323353 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8561034348 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.266666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262953128603 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729707196615 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834315251658 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179758494604 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955409977989 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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