It is argued that increasing the minimum age requirement for drivers is the most effective measure to enhance the safety on the roads. While this approach can potentially reduce road accidents, I maintain that imposing stricter penalties for traffic violations and improving public transportation would be more feasible solutions to address the root causes of traffic accidents.
Undoubtedly, raising the minimum age for vehicle drivers can decrease the number of road accidents. In reality, young drivers who may lack experience and maturity are more likely to engage in dangerous and reckless driving behaviors, putting themselves and other commuters in danger. Requiring individuals to wait until they are older to obtain a formal driver’s license can encourage them to operate vehicles more responsibly and cautiously, which contributes to a safer driving environment. For example, countries like Japan and South Korea, where the minimum legal age for drivers is higher, have had lower rates of traffic accidents involving young drivers.
However, increasing the minimum age requirement for drivers does not fully address the underlying causes of road accidents. Moreover, it is critical to note that traffic accidents can stem from various factors, including careless driving behaviors or poor transport infrastructure, not solely from young drivers. Thus, stricter punishments for traffic offenses, such as heavy fines or longer license suspensions for repeat offenders, would serve as a more effective deterrent against careless driving behaviors. Additionally, the government should invest money in upgrading public transportation, including providing more bus and train services, which can encourage citizens to rely less on private vehicles, ultimately leading to fewer road accidents. The Mass Rapid Transit System in Singapore, for instance, has significantly reduced the number of private cars on the road by implementing strict laws and penalties for traffic offenses, along with developing a well-established subway and bus system.
In conclusion, although raising the minimum age for vehicle drivers can improve road safety by reducing accidents involving young people, it is vital to address the root causes of traffic accidents through stricter punishments for traffic offenses and upgrades to public transport would be ideal solutions. I am also convinced that once these measures are implemented, traffic commuters will obey these regulations, contributing to a safe driving environment for others.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79032258065 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00184454028 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561827956989 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6332028059 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.692307692 106.682146367 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187644709684 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821698018535 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540891775244 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131348384934 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00664038839875 0.056905535591 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.0946893788 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 50.2224549098 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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