Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
There are different views about whether governments should outlaw extreme sports or people should be free to involve in any sports activities if they so wish. While individuals are not in favour of the risks, I partly agree with the view that taking part in extreme sports is an private optional freedom.
On the one hand, it is obvious that governments should impose an official ban on extreme sports on safety grounds. This is because of in the most these activities, participants often lack the highly-specialised equipment to protect themselves from fatal injuries and especially the good judgement of experienced experts, resulting in only minor errors can cause of serious and even life-threatening injuries. Another reason for this is that people do not have a responsibility to take sensible precautions which will minimise the risk of accidents for everyone involved. Such irresponsible behaviour can only be prevented by banning these sports.
On the other hand, I concur with those who argue that people should be free to do extreme sports. Firstly, overcoming fear of the most dangerous sports is a necessary measure for human’s ability in terms of conquering harsh nature which also is the first step on the road to success of each person. Besides following the passion, if people participate in extreme sports with the express purposes, it can become a proud country. For instance, three young men proud feelings when they became the first ever Vietnamese persons to successfully conquer and raise their national flag on “the world roof-top, Everest”. Secondly, most of these dangerous sports are done with other people so it offers social interaction. For example, you are more likely to go skateboarding or jump out of a plane with a friend. This will help increase the bond between the two of you, and it will also give you the many benefits of socialization.
In conclusion, it seems to me that instead of banning extreme sports, governments should enact laws concerning dangerous sports actions to make sure participants adhere to the recommended safety procedures.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...w that taking part in extreme sports is an private optional freedom. On the one...
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Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'private optional freedom'.
Suggestion: private optional freedom
...w that taking part in extreme sports is an private optional freedom. On the one hand, it is obvious that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22123893805 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97744323976 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592920353982 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.312649528 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.428571429 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261530595615 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909526954188 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769662959345 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165301782069 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457988717298 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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